● 以下是原本在考試時寫的文與自己的改錯,老師同學若看到就幫我指哪裡還有錯吧。
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二、英文作文(20%)
說明:1.依提示在「答案卷」上寫一篇英文作文。
   2.文長120個單詞(words)以上。
   3.配分比例為內容5分、組織5分、文法4分、用字拼字4分、標點大小寫2分。


提示:請以下面編號1至4的四章圖畫內容為藍本,依序寫一篇文章,描述Jeff的成長過程。
   請注意,文章內容務必涵蓋四章圖意,力求情節完整、前後發展合理。


原文:

When Jeff was young, he like everything, like singing or painting.
When he do this things, he feel very happy.
At the university, he want to get part in some activity.
If only he can find the favorite one.
One day, he and his girlfriend, Diana, walked together and told the things.
Finally, they decided to join a band, becauce Jeff sings very well, and he do love it.
So he and Diana joined a very popular band.
At a party, their song attracted more and more fans.
Jeff turned into a famous person at the university.

原文(翻譯):

當傑夫年輕時,他喜歡所有事物,像唱歌或畫畫。

當他做這事時,他感覺非常快樂。
在大學,他想在一些活動中得到部分。
如果他能找到最喜愛的。
有一天,他和他的女朋友,黛安娜一同走並且告訴了這事。
最後,他們決定參加一個樂團,因為傑夫唱得非常好,並且他確實喜歡它。
因此他和黛安娜參加了一個受歡迎的樂團。
在一個派對,他們的歌吸引了越來越多的崇拜者。
傑夫在大學變成一個著名的人。

改正後:
                                 Jeff's Life
     Since Jeff was baby, he like anything, such as singing or painting.  He like it very much, so after he grow up, he was good at singing.

     After he go to university, Jeff started joining in different extracurricular activities, such as camping, riding bicycle and play football.  But he hasn't found the activity which he most likes.
     One day, he and his girlfriend, Diana, walked together and told the things.  Diana told him, she likes play a piano very much, when Jeff play guitar and sing, she could help the accompaniment.
     Finally, they decided to join a band, becauce Jeff sings very well, and he do love it.

     So he and Diana joined a very popular band.
     At an interscholastic competition, their song has attracted more and more fans.

     Jeff finally finds what he wants, and achieve his dream.

改正後(翻譯):
        傑夫的人生
  自從Jeff童年起,他就喜歡任何事物,像是唱歌或畫畫。他非常喜歡,所以當他長大後,他擅於唱歌。

  進入大學後,傑夫開始加入許多不同的課外活動,像是露營、騎腳踏車和足球。但他一直沒有找到自己最喜歡的。
  有一天,他和他的女朋友,黛安娜一同走並且告訴了這事。黛安娜告訴他,她很喜歡彈鋼琴,在傑夫彈吉他邊唱歌時,她或許能幫忙伴奏。
  最後,他們決定參加一個樂團,因為傑夫唱得非常好,並且他確實喜歡它。
  
  因此他和黛安娜參加了一個受歡迎的樂團。
  在一個校際比賽,他們的歌吸引了越來越多的崇拜者。

  傑夫終於找到自己想要的,並且實現夢想。

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